Wednesday, May 11, 2011

Caught in the Storm

Since sentences won't come to me and poetry has been our study the past two weeks, here is my own stab...

words and expressions
cut to the deepest part.
two talking as if on different floors of a building

the moments replay
again and again in the brain's record.
two walk away in a duel's fashion

tears burn
demanding their release.
strong-will pushes them back to the dungeon

calm returns
to the body like a blanket on a shivering child.
alligator skin and a duck's back are remembered
because that's life...


  1. I love the repetition in this poem, Lauren! The mood is so quiet, contemplative. I found myself wanting to hear more. Keep writing!!

  2. Wow...the emotion just pours out of this Lauren.
    I can tell it's been a tumultuous few days--and I'm sorry. Let me know if you want to talk.

  3. what great use of figurative language. your emotions clearly come through in your writing. this poetry unit is really working for poems from the unit i did were so lame compared to this...great job!